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The final words of a sage.
« on: December 06, 2008, 01:55:03 AM »
I've just come up with this on a wild whim...It's the final words of a sage of a novel I've been working on.

"Chains of the forbidden, covered in blood of those who would impeach upon my trek..."
"Tie themselves unknowingly to the plot I have set and to the events I have planned."
"Here lies my greatest creation and last..."
"A beast to destroy those who I have hated for so long..."

~Vindrick Lun'Alio

Feedback is welcome.
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Re: The final words of a sage.
« Reply #1 on: December 06, 2008, 09:39:48 AM »
a 'horrible' habit you mean.

well since you've posted something like a poem, I shall post some of my pathetic crap =3

I trace the path of a forlorn one,
In the light I saw the trait I lacked,
meaningful or meaningless, that was unclear,
by the dark self that roamed, I was sure.

and actually what's the rough situation when he dies for him to say such a thing? without knowing it's hard to see whether it fits the context or not.
The wind will cease to be one day, and as I pass, what marks remain?
Graduation is not the end, we'll still be friends from here on out

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Re: The final words of a sage.
« Reply #2 on: December 08, 2008, 02:44:27 AM »
After being defeated by Nathan, Vindrick has to retreat and be removed from the face of the Isle Kingdom. Feeling that he has been wronged even though his lust for darkness has transformed his mind and sanity he creates a creature to destroy a city of people for everyone will remember him(In a sense).

While being away he has to fear that Nathan will come and find him or Lord Leon will before all three of their life spans are up(Currently only those two are alive who can defeat him as he is) also he fears his plans will be interrupted by creatures who try to keep the arcane world safe (They're bretherens of elves) and so he wants to come back into the newer generation to take over the Isle kingdom (He thinks he will make a great king, though he has no idea how to please anyone but himself) and see how his rein is. But because of said problems, he creates the creature above to make everyone remember him and to destroy his allies.

Bah, tried to keep things secret but it came out all jumbly and confusing but hope it helps.

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Re: The final words of a sage.
« Reply #3 on: December 08, 2008, 03:39:35 AM »
somehow, after reading the last plot, it feels like the 'final words' sound more like words written on a tomb before he dies or something, then he releases/summons the demon.
The wind will cease to be one day, and as I pass, what marks remain?
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Re: The final words of a sage.
« Reply #4 on: December 08, 2008, 04:39:42 AM »
Well I guess the title is suppose to be a metaphor kind of.
Also I planned for him to die then like say two weeks pass, the earth will shake and a giant gap in the ocean appears (Like the bottom spot in the ocean, I belive its by/in canada?) and the creature will jump out of the hole and start killing people or so. I should change it though...

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Re: The final words of a sage.
« Reply #5 on: December 08, 2008, 02:34:44 PM »
nice..

reminds me about naruto ( jiraya)
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