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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #105 on: March 05, 2009, 10:46:00 AM »
I downloaded it but haven't gotten to try it yet, these past few days have been a bit chaotic. Will try in the near future and give some feedback here.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #106 on: March 05, 2009, 01:12:39 PM »
I left some comments at Eminweb.com.  :)


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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #107 on: March 05, 2009, 01:43:55 PM »
@Forgotten_Bard, it's for a love song I'm writing to Taylor as a birthday present. Think you'd be up to that? (it's more of a mushy-catchy pop song than anything else, since those are the only love songs I own :P)

@sora, oh that's fine. Play it whenever you have time. It's a short predemo, but it does show off my custom sprites, as well as let you get your butt whooped by the blizzABS enemy AI experience some of the gameplay. I even show off some of meh sprited eyecandy at the end  :o

@Reives, alright, as soon as you get the time, feedback would be GREAT! After the full release on the 14th (I said the 14th, right?), I'm going to revamp chapter one, and make it better (which will include MORE gameplay, a sidequest, and adding back in the spells that Nethera is supposed to have at the beginning of the game. They are being left out of the initial release due to time constraints). All feedback will be taken into consideration.

@Starlight, GREAT!!! Thanks for posting. I responded.

@all, if you like this game, check out eminweb.com *shameless plug*

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #108 on: March 05, 2009, 05:51:57 PM »
hmmm I'll think about it.... I'll get back .... wait....

I might need some descriptions of Taylor or the person it is addressing and i think i can do it (bear in mind if it is a love one i kinda need to know who it is being told to and about them to make something that might work)
A letter, a word
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A sentence, a paragraph
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A page, a story
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A book, a novel.
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They all mean so little when you can't take time to put your soul into the work.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #109 on: March 06, 2009, 09:19:28 AM »
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it's for a love song I'm writing to Taylor as a birthday present
I'd still say making it yourself, however bad, would be a better representation of your sincerity/effort put into the present itself. But I guess up to you.
and, you can't seriously be giving just a poem?
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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #110 on: March 07, 2009, 02:20:18 AM »
Don't listen to sora legacy, it's a great idea, but I agree that you should write it yourself. After all bard doesn't know anything about Taylor.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #111 on: March 08, 2009, 05:22:55 AM »
to restate what I put, I know nothing about her so i can't really write one... also if you think of ways to describe Taylor to me... you will have essentually created the base for your own kind of poem for Taylor anyways...
A letter, a word
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A sentence, a paragraph
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A page, a story
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A book, a novel.
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They all mean so little when you can't take time to put your soul into the work.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #112 on: March 08, 2009, 04:24:39 PM »
ah, I guess I'll make it myself then. I've been feeling especially dramatic and cheesy lately, so I might be able to pull it off. I'm horrible at describing peoplez.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #113 on: March 08, 2009, 05:59:27 PM »
then don't describe... there is a reason why poetry doesn't always give features about people...
A letter, a word
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A sentence, a paragraph
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A page, a story
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A book, a novel.
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They all mean so little when you can't take time to put your soul into the work.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #114 on: March 08, 2009, 06:27:12 PM »
Don't describe? What do you mean by describe her then? The thing I dislike about writing poetry is it's so much harder than prose. I can write really good flowing descriptions in prose, as well as describe emotions quite well. But when it comes to poetry...any tips on that, since I've decided to do this myself?

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #115 on: March 09, 2009, 12:55:40 PM »
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I see the rain, I think of her,
my heart is locked, in solitude,
To recover from the wounds she inflicted,
As it cries within, my heart is like the sky,
As the rain falls, it's like my heart crying,
and the rain reminds me, I yearn for her.

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staring at the night sky,
I was waiting for you,
I will wait forever for you,
for the day you're ready and willing.

The girl's nick is virus, here was one sucky idiotic poem I made...:
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virus, oh virus
you are really, a virus,
you've attacked me,
and spread throughout me,
now you've left me,
a scar within me.

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love is a feeling, which cannot be expressed in words
love gives happiness, but also pain
love comes gradually, heartbreak follows immediately
love is felt, by two persons, but not alone.

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seeing you, loving you
I just can't, stop thinking
why can't I forget you?
You make me happy,
you drive me crazy,
I just love you too much.
These are some of the poems I made, somewhat related to love. You can use them as a reference, though many of them suck. I'd say, no need to add in description of facial features or what, but if you want you can add in descriptions of her character.
And, it doesn't mean you only write one poem. Write the first one, throw away if it sucks, and work on it to make it better, if you really wanna give a good one.
The wind will cease to be one day, and as I pass, what marks remain?
Graduation is not the end, we'll still be friends from here on out

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #116 on: March 09, 2009, 02:12:56 PM »
Making a good poem sounds like spriting  :o

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #117 on: March 10, 2009, 11:14:14 AM »
lol, then again, many things can be made to be the level of a pro with enough practice and guidance.
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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #118 on: March 11, 2009, 05:08:33 PM »
dont throw away the first draft....

Unless you have some spark of influence while you write it...

Keep every draft and build off of each one.  Writing and poems are like... drawing pictures...

you may start with a crooked circle and end up with a picture of a waterfall... the circle might be erased sooner or later, but you have to build off of it first... smoothing it out or changing its shape...

I have every first draft, even the checken scratch idea webs I made... cause I never know when my mind might say "Hey this looks or sounds better" or "This needs more description"...
A letter, a word
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A sentence, a paragraph
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A page, a story
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A book, a novel.
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They all mean so little when you can't take time to put your soul into the work.

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Re: Darkness Rebirth[NEW prerelease"Demo" Now Up!]
« Reply #119 on: March 13, 2009, 06:50:45 PM »
Thanks for the advice on poetry guys, I really appreciate it.

On DR, I'm going to have to extend the release date by another week or so, since I've fallen ill (blasted adrenal glands hate me). Sorry, but I can't predict what my body will do, it's very inconvenient! (can't ever get sick AFTER I finish my work)