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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #15 on: April 14, 2010, 04:43:30 AM »
Hmm... But it didn't really scare me like TML did, no offense. XD As in, it isn't metaphoric and it isn't really mysterious - girl enters house, experiences strange phenomena, she is doomed. TML is really creepily confusing, because you don't really know what even the main character is.

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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #16 on: April 18, 2010, 03:24:32 AM »
Hello, fellow writer! Just dropping by to give some feedback

This was entertaining enough, although air quotes aren't enough to make me call it a book. It's not written like a diary, either---it is one. Apparently you need to figure out exactly what you are, too. You're published or you aren't. Pick one. And stop abusing those poor ellipses! :angry:

By the way (highlight to read), the "ring" seen in the videotape is created when Sadako's mother covers the well. Last thing she ever sees.

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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #17 on: April 19, 2010, 08:23:40 AM »
Thanks for the feedback, and for explaining what the elusive ring was. Anyway, I put published in quotes to show that I'm not a real writer. That means you won't find my books, if you can call them that, on someone's bookshelf or in a store or a library, but you might find them in someone's "My Documents" folder. My intention was to write it exactly like a real diary. Think of Poe's "MS. Found in a Bottle", for example. There is no "He picked up the pen", for example, there's only "I picked up the pen".

Thanks for welcoming me. Oh and, I have no idea what ellipses you're talking about. I do.

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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #18 on: April 19, 2010, 04:57:38 PM »
okay, what's the difference between 'written like a diary' and 'it is one.' wouldn't 'it is one' mean that it's someone's actual, non-fiction diary, and 'written like one' mean that it's fiction like this? :salbrow:

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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #19 on: April 19, 2010, 05:06:43 PM »
While I'd like to believe this thing was found in a burned out house or something, this diary is pure fiction.

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Re: "Book" loosely based on TML
« Reply #20 on: April 19, 2010, 05:19:15 PM »
yeah... i know that... :seraisweatdrop: