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Kite
« on: July 27, 2009, 03:12:55 AM »
Well, this is what I've been sneaking off to do while semi-absent today. D: It's my first serious attempt at writing/producing/singing a pop song.

It's name is "Kite"/"Fen Zheng"; it's in Chinese (which is strange since I'm much more familiar with English than Chinese now, but I thought it fitted the song more).


It's still work in progress and incomplete though, and here's the current mock-up:
http://www.freebirdgames.com/sounds/KiteWIP2.mp3

[^Updated; WIP2]


Kite / "Fen Zheng"

Lyrics (incomplete):

zai na ge mei you xia yu de-e yi tian 
(on a day that's not raining)

ciu sai yi jie su le 
(the soccer game had already finished)

da jia dou san kai le   chu le   ni wou 
(everyone had already left, except you and I)


ni zhan zai na ge cao ping de zhong xin
(you stood in the middle of the field)

chang quin yi lou dao cao di
(long skirt touching the grass)

shuang shou wou je wou ge ni de  feng jeng
(holding the kite I gave you with both hands)


lan lan de tian
(the sky is blue)

bai bai de yuin
(the clouds are white)

wei feng zai chui
(the breeze is blowing)

feng zheng zai fei
(the kite is flying)

fen zheng zai lan tian fei xiang
(the kite is flying high in the blue sky)

[Chinese characters version of lyrics; thanks to Nikhed for translating!:

在那个没有下雨的一天
球赛以结束了
大家都散开了,除了你我

你站在那个草坪的中心
长裙以(搂)到草地
双手握着我给你的风筝

蓝蓝的天
白白的云
微风在吹
风筝在飞
风筝在蓝天飞(翔)]

Now to get some sleep. o: Singing while sleepy when everyone's asleep = bad. All feedbacks welcomed and appreciated. I'll finish this tomorrow or the day after.
« Last Edit: September 04, 2009, 12:28:02 AM by Reives »

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Re: Kite
« Reply #1 on: July 27, 2009, 11:36:50 AM »
P.S. If someone who can type Chinese on their computer could help me type those lyrics into real Chinese characters, that'd be awesome. My comp can't type Chinese. :<

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Re: Kite
« Reply #2 on: July 27, 2009, 01:40:46 PM »
I am in love with this song. :seraismile:

I think my computer can type Chinese, but I gotta check. (I know it can handle other languages.)
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Re: Kite
« Reply #3 on: July 27, 2009, 01:53:04 PM »
Yes, it's a cute song. :)

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« Reply #4 on: July 27, 2009, 04:38:06 PM »
I figured out how to type Chinese on my computer! Yay~! Well, technically the function used is "input x", but that's not the point. :P
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« Reply #5 on: July 27, 2009, 05:36:47 PM »
Thanks. c': And ah, nice! I gotta set the language pack up on my laptop sometimes. But oh, my dad just came back, so I can use his comp to type it up instead of bothering ya for now. :reivsmile:

Here's a more recent version (some minor fixes and a bit longer in length. The lyrics are still on hold and is temporarily repeating the first verse):
http://www.freebirdgames.com/sounds/KiteWIP2.mp3

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« Reply #6 on: July 27, 2009, 05:46:22 PM »
No problem. :kardiansmile: Just let me know if you need any help.
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Re: Kite
« Reply #7 on: July 27, 2009, 08:17:45 PM »
Here is the chinese translation, although some of the words Reives put down aren't correct (wou should be wo.) Furthermore, I just inputted what Reives put down and made a few edits, so these might not be the exact words used.

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在那个没有下雨的一天

此赛以借宿了

大家都三代了出了你我

你站在那个彩屏的中心

长裙一楼到草地

双手我惊愕我哥尼的风就鞥

兰兰的天

白白的运

为风在吹

风筝在飞

芬正在蓝天飞翔
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Re: Kite
« Reply #8 on: July 27, 2009, 08:40:24 PM »
Wow, this is a wonderful song. Very calm and calming, very beautiful background music  and I love the melody. Your voice is a little hushed, but I dont know if it makes the song worse, because it is a calm song.

You know, you have become a really good music producer (composing and performing).  :)

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Re: Kite
« Reply #9 on: July 27, 2009, 08:42:59 PM »
I like the hushed vocals. If they were too loud, the mood of the song would be ruined. (And Squall, you're being redundant. :D)
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Re: Kite
« Reply #10 on: July 27, 2009, 09:32:16 PM »
Thanks ya guys, glad you enjoyed it. c': Speaking of hushed, the voice's does seem rather overly quiet. I updated the link with a version that brings it up just a tiny bit; the hushed tone remains, of course. :reivsmile:

And ah, thanks for the lyrics translation mepwnn! There're a few typos but no prob, I'll use it as base when I get a hold of my dad's comp.

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« Reply #11 on: July 27, 2009, 09:34:33 PM »
I listened to it for 50 minutes now (still listening) and realized that this is a great song for this time very calming, helps to keep my concentration and does not make sleepy.

(Local time 03:34 AM at the moment.)

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Re: Kite
« Reply #12 on: July 27, 2009, 10:22:12 PM »
Hahah, well when I recorded that vocal part it was around the same time in my time zone; partly explains the hushed voice. :P

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Re: Kite
« Reply #13 on: July 27, 2009, 10:31:14 PM »
I'll ask my brother to do the better translations later (I haven't been takikng chinese for a long time ^^')
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Re: Kite
« Reply #14 on: July 27, 2009, 10:48:18 PM »
在那个没有下雨的一天
球赛以结束了
大家都散开了,除了你我

你站在那个草坪的中心
长裙以(搂)到草地
双手握着我给你的风筝

蓝蓝的天
白白的云
微风在吹
风筝在飞
风筝在蓝天飞(翔)

a lot of the pinyin u put down doesn exist xD
btw my bro made lotsa mistakes
the words in parenthesis are the ones im not sure about
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