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Title: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 04, 2009, 12:14:33 AM
Many of you may be familiar with Laura Shigihara, whether it be her Plants vs. Zombies hit song (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0N1_0SUGlDQ#) or her vocal in Quintessence's ending theme, Drift.

Her RPG, Melolune (formerly known as The Blue Star) is now released (as an entrant to the IGF competition). You can download it here:
www.freebirdgames.com/shigi/Melolune.exe (http://www.freebirdgames.com/shigi/Melolune.exe)

For additional information on the project, visit her game's blog:
http://leebleforest.wordpress.com/ (http://leebleforest.wordpress.com/)

(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fleebleforest.files.wordpress.com%2F2009%2F11%2Fmelolune.jpg%3Fw%3D500%26amp%3Bh%3D375%26amp%3Bh%3D375&hash=cb3d9a479d9e372d5d9d60f4d9f38c05)

(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fleebleforest.files.wordpress.com%2F2009%2F11%2Fmelolune-gleem.png&hash=9a0ffc39ac3c70aad7deefde4550f5c5)

(P.S. She wrote a fantastic original soundtrack for it as well!)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 04, 2009, 05:46:07 PM
has it been extended, or just re-rereleased? (i'm assuming the first one) i played when it was blue star, and it was pretty fun ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 04, 2009, 05:48:18 PM
It's largely revamped, with new mechanics (with music-related game-play components) and improved everything. See for yourself. c:
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on November 04, 2009, 05:49:45 PM
^Well so far so good. (One glitch in battle system from what game shutet down, but nohing big) ^_^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 04, 2009, 05:58:50 PM
cool! i'll be playin when i get the chance!
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Nolund on November 04, 2009, 07:42:55 PM
I'll definitely have to download this. I was just replaying the game not too long ago, and I'm glad she's finished it.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 04, 2009, 07:46:10 PM
Has she finished it or has she just continued it?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Amaranth on November 05, 2009, 07:51:29 AM
Oh, cute! I love this . . . I was sad when the demo ended . . . :(
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 05, 2009, 02:10:15 PM
Aye Vasha, it's not 100% complete - but it's 80-90% complete. o:
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: mepwnn on November 05, 2009, 08:40:36 PM
I'll wait for the full release - that way I'll be surprised
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Ruzu on November 07, 2009, 05:17:26 PM
I remember playing this when it was known as Blue Star, I loved it really. Though I felt some of the battles were too hard. XD

The music is beautiful also. Definitly worth the try for those who haven't played it before, or are still deciding.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Chris on November 09, 2009, 11:10:26 PM
I'm too tempted to download it judging from the screenshots but I'll wait till it's 100% complete.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 12, 2009, 10:20:24 AM
i'm playin through and i think i'm almost to the point where the last one ended off.

i like the music! ^^ are there any lyrical songs besides melolune?

EDIT: also, does anyone know what the lyrics to melolune mean?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: VanityPride on November 13, 2009, 12:29:46 PM
oh the game looks really nice, and based from the screenshots i might like it. will download after i play this game im currently playing.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on November 13, 2009, 12:30:45 PM
oh the game looks really nice, and based from the screenshots i might like it. will download after i play this game im currently playing.

This game is hightly recomend ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Thunderbird on November 13, 2009, 12:38:57 PM
Cool, I defintely have to try it when it's finished.
I love the song "Drift" <3
Hoping for more such nice songs in the game ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on November 13, 2009, 12:40:12 PM
Cool, I defintely have to try it when it's finished.
I love the song "Drift" <3
Hoping for more such nice songs in the game ^^

So far they're all realy nice. ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Raxus on November 13, 2009, 05:57:14 PM
It was an interesting game. The wierd... "Moogles" was it?, scared me though.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 13, 2009, 09:07:23 PM
they're called 'leebles' :P my brother says that they look like a demented baby of mew (from pokemon) and a moogle or cat or something
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: VanityPride on November 13, 2009, 09:08:41 PM
Cool, I defintely have to try it when it's finished.
I love the song "Drift" <3
Hoping for more such nice songs in the game ^^

you mean the game is still not finished?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Rayen on November 13, 2009, 09:10:19 PM
Nope.

it's not 100% complete - but it's 80-90% complete. o:
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: VanityPride on November 13, 2009, 09:42:09 PM
Nope.

it's not 100% complete - but it's 80-90% complete. o:

oh i quess i will have to wait for it to finish.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Amaranth on November 13, 2009, 09:45:30 PM
Why wait when the demo's up? :reivsmile:
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Raxus on November 14, 2009, 12:35:07 AM
It's a Demo, Demo is before th game actually comes out. :P The full download is something entirely different.

BTW, How're you doing, Ama?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: VanityPride on November 14, 2009, 04:02:46 AM
It's a Demo, Demo is before th game actually comes out. :P The full download is something entirely different.

BTW, How're you doing, Ama?

its Aya :) well im ok thanks for asking :) yeah like you said the full game is different.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Amaranth on November 14, 2009, 08:52:35 AM
It's a Demo, Demo is before th game actually comes out. :P The full download is something entirely different.

BTW, How're you doing, Ama?

I'm not an idiot, Raxus. ::)

I know the difference between a demo and a full game. I was just telling Aya that she could start having fun with the game now by playing the demo.

And he was talking to me, Aya, but I'm glad to hear you're okay. :)

I'm not doing so well, Raxus, but that's a discussion for another thread.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: VanityPride on November 14, 2009, 11:37:57 AM
It's a Demo, Demo is before th game actually comes out. :P The full download is something entirely different.

BTW, How're you doing, Ama?

I'm not an idiot, Raxus. ::)

I know the difference between a demo and a full game. I was just telling Aya that she could start having fun with the game now by playing the demo.

And he was talking to me, Aya, but I'm glad to hear you're okay. :)

I'm not doing so well, Raxus, but that's a discussion for another thread.

oh my bad. i thought he had a typo.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 14, 2009, 05:53:55 PM
so i was playing through the game and i found these two people:

Spoiler: show
(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi656.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fuu284%2FBDRaccoon%2FKan.png&hash=a2da8e0c71c71604a9a1ec275a1bf058)

Spoiler: show
(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi656.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fuu284%2FBDRaccoon%2FJames.png&hash=25aa07068de7a0916023618fa69a338d)


Any possibility that Kan Gao and James Q. Zhang made a cameo in melolune? o.O
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on November 14, 2009, 05:56:08 PM
so i was playing through the game and i found these two people:

Spoiler: show
(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi656.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fuu284%2FBDRaccoon%2FKan.png&hash=a2da8e0c71c71604a9a1ec275a1bf058)

Spoiler: show
(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi656.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fuu284%2FBDRaccoon%2FJames.png&hash=25aa07068de7a0916023618fa69a338d)


Any possibility that Kan Gao and James Q. Zhang made a cameo in melolune? o.O


Sounds reasonable... I think the answer is yes. Or at least inspiration ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 14, 2009, 06:04:33 PM
Oh yep, we did make cameos in there. :P But ahahah, apparently James got the girl flautist character sprite! (Or so I assume, since I was the one talking.)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Rayen on November 14, 2009, 06:09:20 PM
How do you know it's a girl, hm? How do you know it's not a guy with long hair? :p
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 14, 2009, 06:13:09 PM
I just finished the demo. Isn't that where the last one left off?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 14, 2009, 06:50:02 PM
Ah eep, I suppose it is then. I didn't get to the end with the last one, so I just assumed from what I read. The game-play component should be expanded/redone though.

How do you know it's a girl, hm? How do you know it's not a guy with long hair? :p
B-b-because I saw her RTP character portrait, and she had bewbs. D:<
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 14, 2009, 08:15:59 PM
the edit has the arm covering up that area, so it could be either way...
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 15, 2009, 09:17:01 PM
Oh no, I meant on its actual character picture / portrait - it's a character that came with the RM resource package, so there was a provided matching picture.

By the way, Laura made a youtube account today to upload a video for this:

[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N3sxtQE4g1w[/youtube]

Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 15, 2009, 10:04:12 PM
see, i never saw a bunch of those scenes. was i supposed to? did i get the wrong demo or something?

EDIT: also, if someone had the words to that song in english, that would be awesome
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on November 16, 2009, 10:04:48 AM
In the intro, did you have to place the 3 melolunes onto the pedestals to form the music part-by-part? Only the new version has that, so if you did then it should be the right one.

As for the lyrics to the song, if I remember right it is actually a made up language for the game, so I don't think there's a direct translation for it. She may have what theme it was supposed to be though.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on November 16, 2009, 03:18:33 PM
I finaly played that video, and I must again say, that it's soooooooooo NICE! ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on November 16, 2009, 06:07:55 PM
In the intro, did you have to place the 3 melolunes onto the pedestals to form the music part-by-part? Only the new version has that, so if you did then it should be the right one.

As for the lyrics to the song, if I remember right it is actually a made up language for the game, so I don't think there's a direct translation for it. She may have what theme it was supposed to be though.

yeah, i had to. i guess i just expected more... :'(

and so... it doesn't mean ANYthing? wow, i thought it was in japanese... shows how much i know :P
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Candide on December 12, 2009, 06:17:48 AM
Awesome game :) But it just had to end at an interesting part D:<
I love the maps. So fairytale like.
What irks me is the fact that the facesets don't really look too good. They kind of look like they were drawn by a 10 year old ><
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on December 12, 2009, 04:49:00 PM
I think they were meant to look a bit like that. Kind of little-kiddish. maybe that's just me, though?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Candide on December 13, 2009, 02:17:31 AM
>< It's kind of a shame. The game is full of total awesomeness. It should have better art.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 12, 2010, 08:25:39 PM
I am a bit confused with this...  The story is a little above par... Sadly I can predict most of it before it happens =S

The music is amazing.

Game play is relativly smooth... though is the basic end of the demo when you get to the clubhouse?  Cause after their "Brillian Idea" I can't do anything but talk to everyone and wander around =S
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Raxus on January 12, 2010, 10:13:55 PM
I am a bit confused with this...  The story is a little above par... Sadly I can predict most of it before it happens =S

Same here. I didn't understand why it got so many "amazing" reviews. ._. But the music and graphics are amazing. ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: foxwatcher on January 13, 2010, 12:48:01 AM
Oh weird, I came here to comment about Mirror Lied and I see another game that I helped test all of one week ago :P
Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
I am a bit confused with this...  The story is a little above par... Sadly I can predict most of it before it happens =S
The story is actually very good.  I'm helping Laura test some of the mid to end game material that hasn't been released yet and it's amazing.  I guarantee that you won't be able to predict the core parts of the story, which is basically what the first part of the game sets up so well.  I hope I'm not violating anything by saying this, but Aero and Liele's background will blow you away.    I actually enjoyed the first part of the game because the dialogue was so well-written; I think she nailed both the serious foreshadowing and the humor.  But anyways, that's just my two cents. 

And as other posters have mentioned, the music and graphics are fantastic!
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on January 13, 2010, 02:44:16 AM
I must agree. This games is realy "kawaii" ^^
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 14, 2010, 07:18:42 PM
Oh weird, I came here to comment about Mirror Lied and I see another game that I helped test all of one week ago :P
Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
I am a bit confused with this...  The story is a little above par... Sadly I can predict most of it before it happens =S
The story is actually very good.  I'm helping Laura test some of the mid to end game material that hasn't been released yet and it's amazing.  I guarantee that you won't be able to predict the core parts of the story, which is basically what the first part of the game sets up so well.  I hope I'm not violating anything by saying this, but Aero and Liele's background will blow you away.    I actually enjoyed the first part of the game because the dialogue was so well-written; I think she nailed both the serious foreshadowing and the humor.  But anyways, that's just my two cents. 

And as other posters have mentioned, the music and graphics are fantastic!

many authors forge such claims but remember a solid story throughout is better than any surprise given to a flimsy start of a story.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: foxwatcher on January 15, 2010, 04:13:23 AM
Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
many authors forge such claims but remember a solid story throughout is better than any surprise given to a flimsy start of a story.
Here's the thing, I don't think Melolune's story had a flimsy start at all, I thought the beginning was actually very good and here are some reasons why:  The dialogue was very well written, the quality being definitely above average.  The character development is smooth and natural, there is sufficient foreshadowing, and the pacing is good.  Additionally, I think there was a good mix of serious moments and humorous ones... neither detracts from the other.  The humor is subtle (the talking signs, the high-class zombie, the drag queen equipment vendor, all things that made me laugh because of how they were integrated).  The new intro (the one with the child talking in the beginning) was very well done.  It introduces Achaius' childhood world in such a way that asks a lot of questions and builds curiosity; the build up to the title screen was quite artistic and left me wondering how and why the protagonist ended up in this Leeble village.  The first couple hours felt very balanced and polished, and really pulled me into the story... I felt invested in the Leeble village by the time I left, I really wanted to know more about why Achaius was separated from his twin, I was excited to find out more about the characters.  These are all characteristics of good story writing, especially in the context of an rpg.

I don't think Laura intended for there to be any major revelations in the first hour or two of gameplay; she says on her website that Dominic is a former soldier, so it's not meant to be a huge surprise.  Andy's friend was only a minor twist which was more humorous than anything.  I can't think of too many rpgs that have major revelations in the first 1-2 hours of gameplay.  Although Quintessence has some surprising elements, it certainly doesn't have any major built-up plot twists in the first couple hours... that early part of the game is spent establishing the characters and their relationships.  The reason is because major revelations have a much bigger impact once the story and characters are firmly established and the player has invested a lot of time.  Saying that you predicted parts of the first hour or two of the story doesn't make the story "flimsy" or bad, because most good authors don't put major twists into their rpgs that early because it wouldn't be as effective (and in a lot of cases would feel contrived).  There will be light twists, and surprises that don't require much build... but in order to really be effective, a good twist requires investment and established character relationships first.  I think the first part of the game was very solid, I enjoyed it a lot which was why I wanted to test later parts of the game for her (so I could find out what happens, hehe ^^;).
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Stardale on January 15, 2010, 07:44:36 AM
foxwatcher has pointed out a lot of points that I truly agree with.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Lunarea on January 15, 2010, 12:07:36 PM
Another thing that needs to be brought up here is Laura's intended audience. Laura is planning to share this game with people who may be very new to games - particularly the roleplaying genre. Some of her intended audience might also be younger. So, those of us who have played a ton of RPGs and those of us who aren't as young might find the story simple. That in itself doesn't make it bad. When you're used to an advanced game, something simple might be boring. Just keep that in mind when reviewing.

Also, every good game gives the player the opportunity to get used to the controls, the characters and the plot. This time is proportional to the time the player spends playing the game. So, if Laura's game is 10 hours long, it's not unreasonable to have that first hour be rather simple and slow to start. It's doing all the necessary setup (as foxwatcher noted: character introduction, controls, definitions and environment significant to the plot, etc) so that once the action does start, the player is more invested.

This isn't flimsy, it's normal. Books, movies and games follow the same formula. Laura just happened to release the demo of just that: the setup. So, yes, it will get better. And no, it doesn't make the story any less solid.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Legacyblade on January 15, 2010, 01:30:42 PM
Forgotten Bard is a bit of a story snob, don't mind him. :P (I am too, but I only give my criticism when it's asked for). I haven't played the game yet, but I wish to know the battle system before I try it. I am a big hater of turn based battles (unless they're animated side view and look very pretty), so I'm hoping it's an ABS (or at least not the DBS). I couldn't find a description of the battle system, anyone able to enlighten me?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: StrawberryFlower on January 15, 2010, 03:21:54 PM
It's a side-view battle system. There aren't any pretty animations, though. :(

The game is cute and good, but the battle system was lacking. I'll play any battle system, but I was sad about the lack of animations (they just move forward, and BAM! enemy gets damaged). No one physically attacks.

Your comment about hating turned-based battle systems reminds me of Star... >.>
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Legacyblade on January 15, 2010, 04:03:56 PM
Ah ok. I might play it, but I just really don't like turn based battles (D&D is an exception, because it's a Tactical Battle System)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 15, 2010, 06:01:03 PM
Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
many authors forge such claims but remember a solid story throughout is better than any surprise given to a flimsy start of a story.
Here's the thing, I don't think Melolune's story had a flimsy start at all, I thought the beginning was actually very good and here are some reasons why:  The dialogue was very well written, the quality being definitely above average.  The character development is smooth and natural, there is sufficient foreshadowing, and the pacing is good.  Additionally, I think there was a good mix of serious moments and humorous ones... neither detracts from the other.  The humor is subtle (the talking signs, the high-class zombie, the drag queen equipment vendor, all things that made me laugh because of how they were integrated).  The new intro (the one with the child talking in the beginning) was very well done.  It introduces Achaius' childhood world in such a way that asks a lot of questions and builds curiosity; the build up to the title screen was quite artistic and left me wondering how and why the protagonist ended up in this Leeble village.  The first couple hours felt very balanced and polished, and really pulled me into the story... I felt invested in the Leeble village by the time I left, I really wanted to know more about why Achaius was separated from his twin, I was excited to find out more about the characters.  These are all characteristics of good story writing, especially in the context of an rpg.

I don't think Laura intended for there to be any major revelations in the first hour or two of gameplay; she says on her website that Dominic is a former soldier, so it's not meant to be a huge surprise.  Andy's friend was only a minor twist which was more humorous than anything.  I can't think of too many rpgs that have major revelations in the first 1-2 hours of gameplay.  Although Quintessence has some surprising elements, it certainly doesn't have any major built-up plot twists in the first couple hours... that early part of the game is spent establishing the characters and their relationships.  The reason is because major revelations have a much bigger impact once the story and characters are firmly established and the player has invested a lot of time.  Saying that you predicted parts of the first hour or two of the story doesn't make the story "flimsy" or bad, because most good authors don't put major twists into their rpgs that early because it wouldn't be as effective (and in a lot of cases would feel contrived).  There will be light twists, and surprises that don't require much build... but in order to really be effective, a good twist requires investment and established character relationships first.  I think the first part of the game was very solid, I enjoyed it a lot which was why I wanted to test later parts of the game for her (so I could find out what happens, hehe ^^;).

Look, you want 'flimsy'?

In the very beggining the parents say to the two boys, "We are going to the mine your older sister will look after you..."  right there screams the parents will die.  That ruined it for me cause one, I no longer felt the emotions but two, it is a generic and uneventful start for a game... sure it is hard to be original these days but they way the dialogue went was as strong as soggy paper. 

DOn't get me wrong there are wonderful bits in it but if the story isn't solid throughout many lose favoritism with it.  Also, the tragedy also instantly shows that *gasp* both boys have separate reactions to it, as we follow one that goes to Leeble village and, "surprise surprise", has forgotten about the power he has been trained in until *gasp* a voice suddenly reminds him at a point in time where someone is in danger.

If you aren't picking up the details of the story that sag the entire story might be the best thing on earth and the music is high but, unless intentionally hinted, such events should not be so predictable anyone can pick them out.  As the story goes on the story gets stronger, the fact Dominic was an ex soldier caught me slightly off guard (though i got the Circo attack unlocked right before this fact so it got me thinking...) The zombie bits were funny though I thought talking to the zombies was dry, over done humor that it could have done without.

The guys with the blue case, while id didn't suspect he worked for Hawk right off, I knew had some shady dealings considered he was quick to guard the case but then offered his services at the next turn.  I can blandly go and point out all these little faults in the story but I think I made my point and now I am just ranting.  Since it is a demo I can understand things being changed, and even if it doesn't I will still play this game for the music...

I'm just saying, for those rare breed of us out there, with a hollow beginning... Our heart is just not there in the game anymore...

So please... before you assault me with another wall of text let me say this.  I am not talking about how fancy or polished some things are, and I understand some of these details can't be fixed... My main upset was how at event changing times the story rang hollow.  Sure I think Quintessence even had a few that did that as well, but it kept its points covered, Intro, proceeding body, and I hope end.

Edit: I realize the target audience may be different but it should still hold some facts for those 'veterans' who want to check it out... I'm not saying go out blazing in a form like Quintessence but the story has to be solid throughout.  Without the little side bits to throw in and make it better.

Second Edit: (At Legacy)  If you don't give criticisms, unless asked then you are letting those that do certain works to possibly believe that everyone is okay... It is when faults and strengths are pointed out that the creator can go back and see what was done right or wrong, since in the end... when one woks on something for so long... they may become attached to it.  So I would like to say, before you push what I say out of mind consider that even some of the most childish games can have little bits that can snag anyone, only if you get them right.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Lunarea on January 15, 2010, 06:26:11 PM
The whole point of foreshadowing is so the player will guess how things will turn out. As was mentioned, there are no major revelations in the beginning - or to be specific, there's nothing in the beginning that's supposed to shock or surprise the player. You're supposed to figure it all out. And there isn't a rule anywhere that there has to be a major shock from the get go.

Some games start you in the middle of action. They're exciting, they might even have surprising elements. Other games start slowly and save the surprises for later. There's nothing wrong with this approach. It's just different and valid - even if it isn't your favorite. Though I think this should be understood before things like plot strength is criticized.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: foxwatcher on January 15, 2010, 07:53:09 PM
Quote from: Lunarea
Some games start you in the middle of action. They're exciting, they might even have surprising elements. Other games start slowly and save the surprises for later. There's nothing wrong with this approach. It's just different and valid - even if it isn't your favorite. Though I think this should be understood before things like plot strength is criticized.

This is a very good point.

@Forgotten_Bard: I'm guessing from your explanation that you don't really have all too much experience with writing (especially not with game and or screenplay writing) because the examples you give of why the story is "flimsy" don't hold up at all and reveal nothing but your personal preference; they reflect nothing universal.

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
In the very beggining the parents say to the two boys, "We are going to the mine your older sister will look after you..."  right there screams the parents will die.

I can think of so many decent movies and games where there is a brief introduction that reveals a significant part of the protagonist's past in order to frame the rest of the story.  Often times it's obvious what is going to happen, which is good.  The subtle foreshadowing helps create the tense feeling that the characters might feel... many people have reported "sensing" something bad was going to happen before it did.  These types of introductions aren't meant to shock you or surpise you, they're just meant to give you a glimpse into the character's past.  Furthermore, this type of understanding and ability to predict the outcome is actually a writing technique; it creates a sense of familiarity and understanding.  If the introduction were too cryptic and gave nothing for the audience to grasp, they'd have a difficult time recalling the event later, which would preclude effectively executing the real twists and revelations. 

Any good writer understands this.

And rather than calling my posts "walls of text" you might try actually responding to what's written inside.  Merely calling my posts a "wall of text" is a cheap and immature way of getting out of a legitimate discussion... and this does nothing but further my belief that you have very limited writing experience.

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
The guys with the blue case, while id didn't suspect he worked for Hawk right off, I knew had some shady dealings considered he was quick to guard the case but then offered his services at the next turn.

I guess I should point out that you're actually completely wrong here.  The blue case has nothing to do with Andy being shady, and is related to something important that happens later in the story (my apologies to Laura if she doesn't want me revealing this).  And as I said earlier (if you had taken the time to read what I wrote you'd have seen this), knowing that Andy was tied to Hawk wasn't a huge twist, it was more humorous than anything.  Good stories often hide the real secrets underneath something else that's far more easy to figure out.

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
My main upset was how at event changing times the story rang hollow.

Can you please clarify this sentence, I'm not sure what you mean here.  The sentence is grammatically incorrect and doesn't make much sense.

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
I realize the target audience may be different but it should still hold some facts for those 'veterans' who want to check it out.

I believe that it does "hold some facts" (by which I can only assume you mean "have something in store for"... because "hold some facts" doesn't really make sense) for veteran players.  I'm in my 30s and I've been playing games since the Atari days; I loved the Final Fantasy series as well as many other old fashioned rpgs.  I'm definitely what you'd call a "veteran player" and I enjoyed the story just fine.  It's not an easy task creating a deep story that is light-hearted enough in the beginning to attract younger players, but has enough foreshadowing and character development to make veteran players curious about what happens next.  I can definitely come up with things she could improve to make the game itself better, but I would not call her story or its execution flimsy. 

One more thing to think about: When it comes to these types of rpgs, you can't just throw out plot twists and surprises with no build.  Rpgs are about creating player investment and gradual integration of the player into the virtual world.  The better established this is, the more effective the response will be later.  I don't think you seem to understand this, but it's good to know that there are others here who do.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 15, 2010, 11:53:08 PM

@Forgotten_Bard: I'm guessing from your explanation that you don't really have all too much experience with writing (especially not with game and or screenplay writing) because the examples you give of why the story is "flimsy" don't hold up at all and reveal nothing but your personal preference; they reflect nothing universal.


Look I have my own damn opinions and I will state my mind how I want but don't think you can assume you know my basis for writing by taking the negative view point.  If we just debated this out I would be fine.  But don't you Dare say my writing experience is sub-par.

I am just saying the intro didn't do it for me can we please leave it at that.

"My main upset was how at event changing times the story rang hollow."  Too flowery for you?  I'll put it in common words if you can't puzzle it out. "It was under my expectations and left a void in me."  Shall I explain void to you or is that word understandable?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Legacyblade on January 16, 2010, 02:01:16 AM
Actually bard knows a good deal about writing. I was just saying that if your audience really likes your story, then you don't have to change the story. That being said, taking Bard's advice into account in your own way could be a good idea, but just try not to take the harshness of his criticism to heart. It's the tenancy of us story snobs to be a bit scathing in our reviews.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: foxwatcher on January 16, 2010, 03:48:39 AM
@Forgotten_Bard: Impressive.  You've managed to once again fail to discuss any of the points I've brought up. 

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
If we just debated this out I would be fine.  But don't you Dare say my writing experience is sub-par.

I'm sorry, but writing a poem that wins a random contest with ambiguous publishing aspirations does not make you an experienced writer.  Do you have any other credentials?  Have you ever actually had any of your work published?  Have you ever made a living off of your writing?  Have you ever received any noteworthy awards (something that people would actually recognize, or something that holds water within professional writing circles)? 

Snobs usually have some credentials.  What are yours? 

And in all honesty you don't even seem to be able to "debate it out"... I've listed a number of reasons for my views, and you clearly don't seem interested in responding in a mature manner.  The first time you dismissed my post as a "wall of text"... and now you're just getting mad and again, surprise surprise, not responding to anything I've said.   

Quote from: Forgotten_Bard
"My main upset was how at event changing times the story rang hollow."  Too flowery for you?

Your statement wasn't flowery, it was just entirely incoherent (http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/incoherent).  Another reason I honestly doubt your writing experience... you have to be able to form coherent sentences in order to write.  Perhaps English isn't your first language, and that's fine... but keep in mind that your sarcasm is especially ludicrous given your apparent inability to form coherent sentences.

Now, if you'd like to have a mature discussion than by all means please address the points I've brought up in my earlier posts.  But if you're going to just get mad and act like a child, then I can't really do anything about that.  I've not only responded to everything you've said, but there have been a number of excellent points brought up that you've failed to address.  This one in particular:

Quote from: Lunarea
Some games start you in the middle of action. They're exciting, they might even have surprising elements. Other games start slowly and save the surprises for later. There's nothing wrong with this approach. It's just different and valid - even if it isn't your favorite. Though I think this should be understood before things like plot strength is criticized.


Now, if your personal opinion is that you didn't care for the intro, then that's your personal opinion.  Just keep in mind that your unfoundedly snobbish attitude does not make your opinion universally correct.  Can we at least agree on that?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 16, 2010, 03:58:32 AM
Unfortunately publishers don't publish works by unknowns but the fact that four of my works have made it that far and I have one best in show for short story in a few art festivals would be as far as I go... Alas I don't have age on my side since I am only 19 but I am still striving to push all 10 of my books to publishers and no I don't do fan fiction... Everything I do is for my own amusement or others, but apparently that isn't good enough for you.

So don't try to stick me with others and if you want to read some I would be happy to point you towards them as a few are saved on forums.

In the long run you can rip this post apart for your amusement but I'm done with this as you constantly keep pressuring me to go further into this and I won't be drawn in again.  I am sorry we got off on the wrong foot and the best of luck to you and the production of Melolune, as I will still play it when it comes out since the music was beautiful.

Edit: yes I know my opinion isn't universal and I am sorry if I made it sound like it is... what friends I have are mostly writers and text based role players so we always take the story to heart.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: foxwatcher on January 16, 2010, 04:05:44 AM
Thank-you for your mature response, it's very appreciated.  I will also step back because I feel that my point has been acknowledged.  I can respect that we have different opinions about the story, and that's totally fine with me.  I have never done RP before, is it fun?  Some of my former coworkers enjoyed it a lot and I promised them I would try it out sometime.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Forgotten_Bard on January 16, 2010, 05:05:20 AM
I can link you to a very good site to start on.

Sorry to over react but I have made a name for my self from my forum short stories and my RPing.  I am actual the RP moderator here, not that my title gave that away <.<"

I can show you some time in either the chat here or via messenger if you have one, though forum is best for longer responses.

I'm going to stop here though as I don't want this to jump off topic.  PM me for more information ;)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Reives on October 16, 2010, 10:00:17 PM
._.

Anyway, here's a recent interview with shigi about Melolune and its soundtrack!

:plat:  http://www.indiegames.com/blog/2010/10/music_melolune_original_soundt_1.html (http://www.indiegames.com/blog/2010/10/music_melolune_original_soundt_1.html)
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Learn more about Melolune by visiting Laura Shigihara's official website ([url]http://shigi.wordpress.com/[/url]). Music for the game is available on Bandcamp ([url]http://laurashigihara.bandcamp.com/album/melolune-original-soundtrack-part-1[/url]).
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Raxus on October 17, 2010, 12:25:20 AM
I will check that out!

Spoiler: show
How many pages of Bard being a jerk to Fox are there? And when did this happen?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on October 17, 2010, 10:21:01 PM
Reives, she mentioned you in the interview! :D
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: silversun on January 29, 2011, 09:35:43 PM
I don't know how many of you follow Shigihara's blog, but OMG.  (http://shigi.wordpress.com/2011/01/12/melolune-facesets/)

I'm even more excited for the game!
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on January 29, 2011, 10:26:47 PM
Those are really cool :D The art is a lot better than the old stuff~ (thought it doesn't have the same looks-like-it-was-draw-bby-a-kid look that i kind of maybe a bit liked about it before :P)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Merlandese on January 29, 2011, 10:51:39 PM
Yay! It's good to see her game is getting an upgrade in quality art.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: L-Kan on February 05, 2011, 07:16:20 AM
I haven't check her blog for like half year, but omg, THOSE FACESETS.

Now i just hope she will fix the sprites...or is she already fix it??

Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: silversun on March 11, 2011, 10:15:02 PM
Hm, I just looked at her site again today, seems the game really is nearing completion:
http://supershigi.com/forum/index.php?topic=64.0 (http://supershigi.com/forum/index.php?topic=64.0)

Hopefully it and TtM will be released soon.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Garuda on September 11, 2011, 01:57:59 AM
I'v been thinking of trying this, where is the most up to date version? Also, is the game done because all I see on the site is a demo.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on September 11, 2011, 08:45:32 AM
It's a pretty cool game (she's got some pretty cool music, and some parts she sings in, too!), but it's not completely done yet. The demo up here should be the most recent demo, I think.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Just Lance on September 13, 2011, 09:51:42 AM
Yeah I like this game too but didn't tuched it since it chrashed when I was playing (and unsaved for a looooog time) ^^' Still I like it and wanna play it but now I havce so little time that it's almost imposible.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Chris on January 13, 2012, 04:06:01 PM
Is Melolune still the same game as when Rieves started the thread? Does it have more content or the changes are purely facesets/audio/artwork?
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Vasha on February 11, 2012, 04:11:02 PM
I don't remember exactly everything from the original demo, but it's mostly the same. There's been some things added in, changed, or fixed here and there, but the demo still ends at the same spot.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Unimaginative Username on April 01, 2012, 03:01:00 PM
It looks good, and probably sounds good too.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: EdmeDeStrange on April 28, 2013, 06:06:12 PM
The Game is really fun, but this one part I am stuck on is where:
Spoiler: show
The Two boys (Their names slip my mind) fell down into the caverns and I can't find all the Melolunes I need down there...I'm Stuck, and I searched everywhere.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Akira on December 06, 2013, 04:43:48 AM
What a great story!
I'll waiting for next melolune
Hope the next melolune released soon! :)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Anime_Stars on March 24, 2014, 02:01:39 PM
I must play zees .-.
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: Eli on April 26, 2014, 03:48:03 PM
I started to port Melolune to Mac a few months ago and I failed.  :reivsweat:

I started my work on porting Quintessence to Mac recently and I'm still struggling with it but in the way I learned a lot more about what needs to be done to port games to the mkxp engine (made by Ancurio, which is used for porting these games to Mac & Linux).

Today I decided to give Melolune another try and in just a few minutes I made a port and I have played it for more than an hour so far and it has worked well. :)

(https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2FP8SqZrCs.png&hash=244d98d5f38367616cf17985efee4c2e) (http://imgur.com/P8SqZrC)  (https://freebirdgames.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi.imgur.com%2FmWFIE3Xs.png&hash=282a97231c8e401427beb257167e52ef) (http://imgur.com/mWFIE3X)

Here is the download link for Mac:
https://app.box.com/s/63gerirohnsn3xe7i3bw (https://app.box.com/s/63gerirohnsn3xe7i3bw)

I know Melolune is put on hold while SuperShigi is working on her new game, but even at the current state it is a game well worth playing.  :)

Notes:
- I had to convert midi files to ogg in order to make them compatible with mkxp engine.

- Save files are located in here:
Code: [Select]
~/Library/Application Support/SuperShigiYou can press Command-Shift-G in Finder and paste the above address in it.

Linux Version:
It just needed a Linux version of mkxp engine, I got it from Ancurio's Linux port of The Mirror Lied, so here it comes:
Melolune Demo for Linux (https://app.box.com/s/2293gmr5iofawjtkrev0)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: russellhal on May 29, 2014, 03:12:54 AM
 I am so going to play this one:)
Title: Re: Laura Shigihara's "Melolune"
Post by: A Fat Kid on January 10, 2015, 11:05:53 AM
The game is good for the first 30 minutes. It's as if it was designed to be played as a short demo, and everything else beyond the demo was rushed and shoddily put together. The cliff dive in quality is steep.

Mapping and music are solid throughout the game. Shigi has the knack of creating absolutely stunning maps, so much so that my own mapping is heavily influenced by hers. There is no need to elaborate about her skill as a musician. The musical puzzles were a neat idea too; I only wish that there were more of them.

But otherwise, Melolune is fairly weak.

The writing isn't anything special. I have to agree with Bard that you could see the parents' deaths from a mile away. The story lost me after the first hour, and Shigi tries to include too many characters without leaving enough time to develop each. That led to me not giving a hoot about anyone except Aero, Achaius and Dominic. The blue haired guy, that professor/scientist, the criminal guy, totally forgettable.

The biggest mistake was the combat system. It should've been stripped from the game. Not a single mob is a challenge, behaving pretty much like bullet sponges. Hit the glass cannon first, then hit the tank over and over til he's dead. The bosses are challenging, but a cake walk once you figure how to beat them. Not a single mob in the game can take a full barrage of specials, meaning you can always kill the healer/glass cannon/support in the first turn before they can even act. It's really quite mindless. Thank goodness Rakuen won't include combat.

This game is responsible for casting doubts in my thoughts regarding Rakuen. On one hand, it shows how much potential Shigi has at producing a masterpiece, so long as she plays her hand right. On the other, it shows how fast she can send a game into the ground.